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Little men with little hearts
What damage you have done;
Little thoughts play little parts
In what is soon to come.
Little laughs of little mirth
Belie the pain ahead –
Little lives have little worth
To those already dead.
Little wants and little fears
Have grown beyond control;
Little pleas nor little tears
Can sway the hardened soul.
Little care or little doubt
Is suffered by the crowd;
Little words of little clout
Dare be spoken aloud.
Little minds pay little heed
To the gathering storm;
Little lands bear little need
For failures to conform.
Little fits and little starts
Herald the farce begun;
Little men with little hearts
What damage you have done.
What damage you have done;
Little thoughts play little parts
In what is soon to come.
Little laughs of little mirth
Belie the pain ahead –
Little lives have little worth
To those already dead.
Little wants and little fears
Have grown beyond control;
Little pleas nor little tears
Can sway the hardened soul.
Little care or little doubt
Is suffered by the crowd;
Little words of little clout
Dare be spoken aloud.
Little minds pay little heed
To the gathering storm;
Little lands bear little need
For failures to conform.
Little fits and little starts
Herald the farce begun;
Little men with little hearts
What damage you have done.
I was watching the biopic Joe and Max and was struck by how little acts of cruelty were committed with so little concern. It's the little things that count, isn't it?
(2013)
(2013)
© 2013 - 2024 A--Anthony
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BEcause you have not asked specific questions to your poem's critique, I will do a very general one.
Firstly, the theme is a well judged one. But, I think you could have broadened the theme a bit in the poem. You are continuously talking about how "littleness" has destroyed the understanding of humanity, and you give this warning to the people who ignore these little things of kindness, and in their cloistered thoughts only bring down the greatness of humankind.
Secondly, this has singsong tone when you are reciting it out loud. The metre is quite consistent. I like this in poetry; it is very set into tone. But precisely because of this, it sounds like a nursery rhyme! Which is great, because it is ironical in its tone itself!
Thirdly, I would have liked if you had connected the two thoughts in each quatrain. I think they deserved a little bit more attention. But, of course, this is poetry, and this is not a drawback at all. I think I love it how you leave the sentences floating in mid-air as a warning.
Overall, it is not a poem of grandeur, but I like it! I think it is because it is not pretentiously grand, and rather straightforward with its central theme, certainly makes it one of my favourites. I will urge readers to actually have a go at this and pause to think about the sentences.
Firstly, the theme is a well judged one. But, I think you could have broadened the theme a bit in the poem. You are continuously talking about how "littleness" has destroyed the understanding of humanity, and you give this warning to the people who ignore these little things of kindness, and in their cloistered thoughts only bring down the greatness of humankind.
Secondly, this has singsong tone when you are reciting it out loud. The metre is quite consistent. I like this in poetry; it is very set into tone. But precisely because of this, it sounds like a nursery rhyme! Which is great, because it is ironical in its tone itself!
Thirdly, I would have liked if you had connected the two thoughts in each quatrain. I think they deserved a little bit more attention. But, of course, this is poetry, and this is not a drawback at all. I think I love it how you leave the sentences floating in mid-air as a warning.
Overall, it is not a poem of grandeur, but I like it! I think it is because it is not pretentiously grand, and rather straightforward with its central theme, certainly makes it one of my favourites. I will urge readers to actually have a go at this and pause to think about the sentences.