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Heavy the head
That wears the crown;
Bowed down with dread,
Pride circled round.

Heavy the arm
That bears the rod,
Inflicting harm
As though from God.

Heavy the heart
That reigns on high;
Ever apart,
A royal lie.

Heavy the realm
That bides the king,
His gilded helm
And lethal sting.

Heavy the blade
Swinging swift down,
Freeing the head
Of its grim crown.

Heavy the grave,
But light the lot
For peoples saved,
And monarchs not.
The Tudors marathon. Enough said.

(2013)
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artisticsoul592 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Great poem!
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A--Anthony Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013
Thanks! :boogie:
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WalkinginDreamlight Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like the imagery of your poem and found it easy to read and visualise.

Thank you for sharing.
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A--Anthony Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013
Thank you for commenting :w00t:
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juliusonsteroids Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
I'm jealous of how smoothly you rhyme. Really ambitious rhyme scheme, especially considering how much you limited yourself in terms of syllable count. Have you ever used a form like a bref double or sonnet? I think you'd be really good at them, and it would be interesting to see what kind of imagery you would use. I think that's what I miss most when I read your poems. I'm used to reading poems that are more image than substance...although I really like how your poems flow and how much action occurs, they still feel somewhat hollow to me.
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A--Anthony Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013
Well, decided to attempt a bref double after your suggestion ;) [link] Enjoy!
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A--Anthony Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
Thanks for the compliment again :D
I like tight rhyme schemes, they keep me from getting too verbose (literary diarrhea, as I tend to describe it to my friends). I do admit most of the terse ones lack a great deal of description, I think I prefer writing ballad-like poems that rest more on story than creating detailed images, probably something I should work on.
I haven't ever tried a bref double or sonnet, but I love different forms, they feel like putting together a jigsaw puzzle with words :) I'll definitely look into trying a few. Thanks!
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